After doing the glossing activity, it helped me to look at the organization of my essay in an easier way. It also helped me to figure out what I needed to add to my essay and what to take out. I started off the essay with facts about the social networking sites and then I added a couple of personal experience stories towards the end. I think that, overall, my organization was effective but I could add more sources and spread out the personal experience stories. I think making these and a couple more changes to my essay will make it more effective and have a bigger impact on the reader.
I also plan to add more descriptive stories to show the pros and cons to these social networking sites. I think that detailed stories are very effective and I should have a few more. I also want to add more quotes to my essay. I think hearing it by someone else also provides a lot of support for whatever point you are trying to make. Glossing my essay really helped me to figure out what else I need to to.
Sunday, February 24, 2008
Thursday, February 14, 2008
Researching
At first I was a little confused about how to begin my research. It was difficult for me to figure out which key words that I should use so that I could get useful results. After figuring that out, I really thought the articles I found were very helpful. They seemed to be exactly what I needed. I had to change my search several times because I was getting articles that related to my topic. After I changed it a couple times I found articles that related to my topic. I thought that the most helpful was the Academic Search Complete, but I also found articles from Infotrac Newspapers and Google. I think that these search engines will really help me get information for my essay. I would tell anyone that was going to use these search engines that it might be difficult at first but that you will get used to it. Also, you can't be too picky on what keywords to use when you search. You should try several times with different words to find the results you need.
Tuesday, February 12, 2008
Topic for Discovery Essay
The topic that I decided on was on how myspace and facebook impact people's personal lives. I really am interested in writing about this and want to learn more about it. I also think that it is very important in our society and it does effect a lot of people.
I think that I will have enough to write about on this topic. I've been hearing several stories dealing with this topic for about a year now and especially recently. I also am interested in writing about this topic so that will help me as I write it. There have been a few things said about it and especially on about how teenagers are easily effected by what is said over myspace and facebook and how they put too imformation on these websites. This important topic does raise more questions like what can we do to prevent this from happening? And does it have any postive effects on people's live? And more. I think it really does matter and it is very important in our society. People's lives are effected everyday by the interenet and especially myspace and facebook.
One of the main reasons I chose to write about this topic is because I think people's lives are effected everyday by this and no one really does anything about it. Kids are putting personal information on these websites and getting themselves in trouble. Kids are also being bullied by messages or comments. There are many ways that people's lives are being impacted.
I think that I will have enough to write about on this topic. I've been hearing several stories dealing with this topic for about a year now and especially recently. I also am interested in writing about this topic so that will help me as I write it. There have been a few things said about it and especially on about how teenagers are easily effected by what is said over myspace and facebook and how they put too imformation on these websites. This important topic does raise more questions like what can we do to prevent this from happening? And does it have any postive effects on people's live? And more. I think it really does matter and it is very important in our society. People's lives are effected everyday by the interenet and especially myspace and facebook.
One of the main reasons I chose to write about this topic is because I think people's lives are effected everyday by this and no one really does anything about it. Kids are putting personal information on these websites and getting themselves in trouble. Kids are also being bullied by messages or comments. There are many ways that people's lives are being impacted.
Thursday, February 7, 2008
Personal Essay Workshop
I want to thank Mandi and Bobby for reading my essay and providing me with a lot of great and helpful feedback. It really helps to have different perspectives and point of views to tell you what you need to do.
They mentioned that they could feel all the emotions I was going through as they read the essay but I needed to add more detail. I should describe the scene more and the tension everyone was feeling. Mandi also mentioned that I should try not to use just and basically a lot which I thought was very helpful and interesting. Bobby thought that the essay progresses well and it started off well. I wasn't really confident on my introduction so it helped to know that it made sense.
I really like getting feedback from my classmates and it was much easier to do revisions using their advice.
They mentioned that they could feel all the emotions I was going through as they read the essay but I needed to add more detail. I should describe the scene more and the tension everyone was feeling. Mandi also mentioned that I should try not to use just and basically a lot which I thought was very helpful and interesting. Bobby thought that the essay progresses well and it started off well. I wasn't really confident on my introduction so it helped to know that it made sense.
I really like getting feedback from my classmates and it was much easier to do revisions using their advice.
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